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Entry 12 — Line Breaks
Friday, November 13th, 2009
I may know as much as anyone in the world about the nature and function of lines breaks. That’s not a major boast: there isn’t much to know about them, and understanding them doesn’t take research or study, just a little commonsensical thought. I’m making them the subject of this entry because of a thread at New-Poetry I got involved with. A few of the contributors to the thread seemed to me to be having trouble fully understanding the device. Anyway, I’ve decided to write a minor primer about it, bringing back my recent Poem poem to illustrate its simplest functions:
. Another Failure
. For half the night
. Poem struggled mightily
. to sing himself a sleep
. that melted understandings into him
. as intricately deepening as April rain
. dislodging a woodland’s smallest wisdoms;
. but nowhere in it did
. anything extend beyond
. its decimal point.
I will now repeat it, with a comment in purple under each of its lines:
. Another Failure
. For half the night
The poem’s first line-break notifies the reader that he’s in a poem, as does every poem’s first line-break; slows his read to force him to pay at least a little more attention to what’s going on in the language of the poem and what its expressing, particularly its imagery, as do all line-breaks; with the corroboration of the poem’s other lines, if the reader glances at them, informs him of the poem’s pace, in this case comparatively quick; gives his mind a resting place from the possibly difficult material of the poem (again, like all line-breaks); presents a hint (possibly misleading) of the kind of poem the will follow as to style, subject matter, rhythmic nature, technique, point-of-view, and the like, in this particular case, mainly suggesting quotidianness via a commonplace diction, and the representation of a highly standard image; and, finally, setting up a rhyme by leaving “night” in an emphazied location of the poem.
. Poem struggled mightily
The poem’s second line-break does most of the things its first one did but also pretty much establishes the poem as free-verse, and puts “might” near its end to rhyme with the final word of the previous line.
. to sing himself a sleep
The next line-break does little new, but the extra time it gives the reader may help prevent his reading “a sleep,” a key contributor to whatever value the poem has, too hurriedly.
. that melted understandings into him
Coming a little late compared to the other line-breaks, this one is responsible for giving its line a feel of magnitude, importance; I believe it will be welcomed for the pause it provides the reader to think about just what its line and the preceding one mean
. as intricately deepening as April rain
The next line-break lets its line extend even more.
. dislodging a woodland’s smallest wisdoms;
Then a line-break halting its line somewhat sooner than the previous line-breaks halted theirs–perhaps indicating the we’ve reached the poem’s peak and are now quieting.
. but nowhere in it did
Another short line, now, stopped before it says anything–stopped also on a word a more standard line-break would not have, to “merely’ keep the reader from being completely on balance.
. anything extend beyond
The penultimate line-break does little more than prevent the reader from too quickly learning where the sentence he’s reading is going.
. its decimal point.
The poem’s final line-break provides it with a sharp short clear end.
Any questions?
Additional comments: when I wrote this poem, I paid little attention to the line-breaks I was making–they came pretty much naturally. I’m sure that’s the way it wis with most composers of free verse. The “did” I thought about before going with, though, and I think I came back to one pair of lines that sounded wrong, and change the line-break between them.
A reader, too, if experienced, ought not pay much conscious attention to the lineation of a work of free verse–but, if effective, it will have a great deal of influence on his understanding of the poem.
One last comment: in the right hands–those of E. E. Cummings, for example–line breaks can be employed to do much more of value in a poem than they do in “Another Failure.”
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You know that Kevin Kelly guy always reminded me of Surllama for some reason.
I’ve always suspected they were one and the same–the two l’s in Surllama are strong evidence of it. And, of course, they are both maximally crude fellows. . . .
Ha, ha! Remember Todd Russell aka Huck Finch? He told me before I moved to California, something to the effect of: “Don’t let California change you, Surllama, I mean Kevin” and I remember thinking, “Nothing can change me!” … and then I became a snob. It happened about four years ago, to be exact. I’ll have to admit, it felt good to give in, like a warm bath of salt.
But seriously, sir, I’m trying to ONLY comment on the stuff I like (hence, the scarcity of any comments … I kid!) … and I like this here poem. I have to admit, I’ve always liked your poetry when you start talking about the tide and the phone ringing to itself, etc. My favorite line by far: “like misspelled lemonade” Good imagery! So there.
Well, I’ve always said negative comments are more helpful than positive ones, but your positive ones have definitely been helpful. As for Huck, we’ve exchanged e.mails since you’ve left. He’s sent me invitations to the parties he yearly has, but I’ve not yet been able to get to one. You should e.mail him, or facebook him. I think he’s on Facebook.