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Entry 387 — 2006 Discussion of a Poem by Crag Hill

Wednesday, February 23rd, 2011

Recently, I’ve been going through the files with the graphics but not the texts of entries I made to my previous blog in search of mathemaku of mine.  I want to number them all, so need a complete list of them.  I think I posted just about all of them to my blog.  In any event, yesterday I brought up a file for an entry (Blog959) whose visits was recorded as close to 200.  Rarely did my old entries get more than 20 visits.   Curious to see what was in the blog, I then brought up the file that had its text, which I think worth quoting here:

17 September 2006: Among the many intriguing items at Crag Hill’s Poetry Scorecard is this found poem of Crag’s that he posted 3 September:

From Index of First Lines Selected Poems Charles Olson

.     I come back to the geography of it,
.     I don’t mean, just like that, to put down
.     I have been an ability–a machine–up to
.     I have had to learn the simplest things

.     I live underneath
.     I looked up and saw
.     Imbued / with the light
.     I met Death–he was a sportsman–on Cole’s

.     In cold hell, in thicket, how
.     In English the poetics became meubles–furniture–
.     is a monstrance,
.     I sing the tree is a heron

.     I sit here on a Sunday
.     It’s so beautiful, life, goddamn death
.     it was the west wind caught her up, as

Amazing poem, this. I’m not a big fan of Olson’s, though I believe he is a major poet, and that some of his poems are A-1. Surely, these lines could only have been from a poet, though. I recognize one or two, but in this discussion will not look up any of them. (Oops, I realize I couldn’t look up very many of them; I do have The Maximus Poems, and several of my anthologies have poems by Olson, but I don’t have the Selected Poems.)

“I come back to the geography of it,”

Anyway, what a beginning, this return to some geography. Olson was probably only returning to a genuine geography, of the locale I feel he jabbered too much about, but here–dislocated by the line-break–”geography” can wing us to the terrain of all kinds of things, including the memory of a breakfast, banking procedures, 3 A.M., everything having a geography. Less surlogically, the word brings us to fundamentals, to the earth, to reality seen large, solid, inanimate . . .

What, I suddenly wonder, would the geography of geography be? Poems like this– effective jump-cut poems, that is–can flip us into such questions. Questions that resonate for the person flipped into them, I mean–as this one will surely not for everyone.

“I don’t mean, just like that, to put down”

Now a jump-cut leaving “geography” to simmer unconnected to any specific, and making the poem’s narrator more than a pronoun through his attempt to explain himself better. His explanation is broken off before getting anywhere, which effectually explains all the better his state of being at loose ends. A main interest is in whether he has just dropped one activity to return to the geography of whatever he’s involved in, and/or inadvertantly “put down” whatever he was doing because superficial or the like compared to geographical questions. “I have been an ability–a machine–up to”

The narrator continues trying to explain himself without finishing any of his ventures into self-analysis. I take this line to mean he’s not been personally/emotionally involved in whatever it is he’s talking about, “up to (now).” Note, by the way, how this line, with its pronounced metaphor, disturbs the quotidian tone of the previous (which, in turn, had demotically countered the academic tone of the first line).

“I have had to learn the simplest things”

Wow, no longer able (I guess) to let his machinery run his life without his involvement, the narrator has to concentrate, start from a sort of zero.

“I live underneath”

We’ve come to a new stanza. That the narrator says he lives underneath, which the lineation compels us to consider, rather than underneath something, opens a world for me. Certainly, we’re with a narrator deepening through himself (as we would expect from the poem’s consisting entirely of lines in the “i” section of an index).

“I looked up and saw”

This line seems planned to follow the one before it. This sudden strong logic out of the chaos of existence as if to reassure us that life does make sense is one of the virtues of found poetry. Again, a line-break re-locates us, in this case keeping us from a transitive verb’s object, compelling us to consider “saw” as an intransitive verb. The narrator has experienced illumination, not just seen some detail of ordinary life. No big deal if the context set us up for this sort of heightened seeing, but something of a (good) jolt in this zone of reduced context.

“Imbued / with the light”

Yikes, this sentence carries on trouble-free from the previous one.

“I met Death–he was a sportsman–on Cole’s”

The grammar now shatters the logic we seemed for a while to be in, just as “Death” shatters the text’s positive bright ambiance. I can’t help, by the way, thinking of Emily at this point. Death, however, is an absurd, trivial figure, some guy pursuing some conventional sport at some named who-cares-where.

“In cold hell, in thicket, how”

After the intrusion of a line with something of the effect of the famous porter scene in Macbeth, a new stanza, and high rhetoric electrifyingly bleakening the scene. Fascinating how “Cole” quickly colors into “cold hell,” by the way. “In English the poetics became meubles–furniture–”

Another weird shift–to the cold, densely thicketted geography of poetics (in English). “Furniture.” Something inanimate, stupid–but comfortable, for our convenience, to be used. . . . I don’t know the meaning of “meubles” but assume it’s some kind of furniture. Somehow, we are now in a man trying to explain himself in a geography/text trying to explain itself. At least, according to my way of appreciating language poems of this sort, which is partially to take them as exposures of mental states.

“is a monstrance,”

I guess we aren’t meant to sit on the chairs or put anything on the tables in the poem. We are definitely in a darkness and a confusion. “I sing the tree is a heron”

But the narrator can sing. He sings (presumably) of a tree’s resemblance to a heron. In other words, something dark (probably) and solid and motionless, like furniture, has something undark and capable of flight in it. Thus, the stanza ends hopefully, to set up the final one, which begins:

“I sit here on a Sunday”

The tone has gone quiet, conventional–but implicitly celebratory, Sunday being generally a day-off, and devoted to (generally happy) religious services. “It’s so beautiful, life, goddamn death”

The chaos of the poem is resolved with this line. The fragments we’ve been stumbling through, dark and light, are life–which is beautiful in spite of the presence of death.

“it was the west wind caught her up, as”

Because of the line before this one, I’m prepared to read this to be about a woman turned magically into a weightless angel the pleasant west wind is going to give a ride to. Chagall, at his undrippiest. I also read the awe of a man beholding a beautiful woman into the line. An image illustrating the climactic previous statement.

Okay, that was a preliminary once-through I hope some reader will get something out of. I did! Don’t know if I’ll return to it. Probably, so I can use it in a book. Don’t know if I’ll have anything better to say about it then, though.

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I’m not ready to say more about the poem now–except that I wondered when I looked at my entry whether I’d mentioned the importance of Crag’s poem’s foundness when I discussed it.  I saw I hadn’t.  In my megalomaniacal opinion, I think I may be the only critic who has ever discussed the full aesthetic value of foundness.  I did this in my discussion, possible two decades ago by now, of Doris Cross’s work–wonderful visual poems brought into being by painting or otherwise defacing, deleting, meddling with dictionary paintings.  (I love Nietzsche not only for all he said, brilliantly, that I agree with, but for the megalomaniacal boasts he made about his accomplishments that have turned out to be valid.)

What I said in my Cross piece isn’t handy, so my comments now will probably be a bit incomplete and not as sharply expressed as what I said in it.   First off, as anyone would agree and as many I’m sure have said, the quotations from Olson, add his life and writings to Crag’s poem. This is important.  But what I think effective appropriation of found materials most importantly does is celebrate the essential logic of the universe.  It reminds us that God is in his heaven allowing accidents to make affirmations–even for someone like I who doesn’t believe in God, and understands that accidents don’t really make affirmations, only happen so often that some of them, especially when a keen discoverer has an eye out for them, are bound to do what Crag’s collection does.  Another, better way of putting it, is that we are reminded of who wonderfully well the human brain finds ways to give existence meanings, meanings that suggest Meaning.

Okay, not a view you’d think anyone would feel like a demigod for having, but it’s more than anyone else has said about foundness that I know of.  And I can’t see how anyone could say it’s wrong.
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.            Poem Consults the Vseineur
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.            However seldom the vseineur
.            said “universe” in Poem’s hearing,
.            he accepted it,
.            however clear it always was
.            that it had misspoken.

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Entry 378 — A Poem by Elizabeth Bishop

Monday, February 14th, 2011

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Over 2,000 Illustrations and a Complete Concordance

Thus should have been our travels:
serious, engravable.
The Seven Wonders of the World are tired
and a touch familiar, but the other scenes,
innumerable, though equally sad and still,
are foreign. Often the squatting Arab,
or group of Arabs, plotting, probably,
against our Christian empire,
while one apart, with outstretched arm and hand
points to the Tomb, the Pit, the Sepulcher.
The branches of the date-palms look like files.
The cobbled courtyard, where the Well is dry,
is like a diagram, the brickwork conduits
are vast and obvious, the human figure
far gone in history or theology,
gone with its camel or its faithful horse.
Always the silence, the gesture, the specks of birds
suspended on invisible threads above the Site,
or the smoke rising solemnly, pulled by threads.
Granted a page alone or a page made up
of several scenes arranged in cattycornered rectangles
or circles set on stippled gray,
granted a grim lunette,
caught in the toils of an initial letter,
when dwelt upon, they all resolve themselves.
The eye drops, weighted, through the lines
the burin made, the lines that move apart
like ripples above sand,
dispersing storms, God’s spreading fingerprint,
and painfully, finally, that ignite
in watery prismatic white-and-blue.

Entering the Narrows at St. Johns
the touching bleat of goats reached to the ship.
We glimpsed them, reddish, leaping up the cliffs
among the fog-soaked weeds and butter-and-eggs.
And at St. Peter’s the wind blew and the sun shone madly.
Rapidly, purposefully, the Collegians marched in lines,
crisscrossing the great square with black, like ants.
In Mexico the dead man lay
in a blue arcade; the dead volcanoes
glistened like Easter lilies.
The jukebox went on playing “Ay, Jalisco!”
And at Volubilis there were beautiful poppies
splitting the mosaics; the fat old guide made eyes.
In Dingle harbor a golden length of evening
the rotting hulks held up their dripping plush.
The Englishwoman poured tea, informing us
that the Duchess was going to have a baby.
And in the brothels of Marrakesh
the littel pockmarked prostitutes
balanced their tea-trays on their heads
and did their belly-dances; flung themselves
naked and giggling against our knees,
asking for cigarettes. It was somewhere near there
I saw what frightened me most of all:
A holy grave, not looking particularly holy,
one of a group under a keyhole-arched stone baldaquin
open to every wind from the pink desert.
An open, gritty, marble trough, carved solid
with exhortation, yellowed
as scattered cattle-teeth;
half-filled with dust, not even the dust
of the poor prophet paynim who once lay there.
In a smart burnoose Khadour looked on amused.

Everything only connected by “and” and “and.”
Open the book. (The gilt rubs off the edges
of the pages and pollinates the fingertips.)
Open the heavy book. Why couldn’t we have seen
this old Nativity while we were at it?
–the dark ajar, the rocks breaking with light,
an undisturbed, unbreathing flame,
colorless, sparkless, freely fed on straw,
and, lulled within, a family with pets,
–and looked and looked our infant sight away.

1955

I like this poem. I especially like the line, “Everything only connected by ‘and’ and ‘and.’” The book sounds like a wonderful one. Too bad that Bishop is negative about so much in the book. But I love the homage to “andness” that I consider her poem best to be–so much and more and more is out there!”

Entry 323 — Rhyming Fun, Part 10

Thursday, December 23rd, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             Except,  of course, appealing to
.             a different taste than these,
.             which lack an edifying view
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.             of tortured sinners’ agony
.             and like felicities
.             of serious morality.

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This is probably my dumbest set of stanzas, but I really don’t like Dante very much.

Entry 322 — Rhyming Fun, Part 9

Wednesday, December 22nd, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             My age was two times greater than
.             the Florentine’s had been
.             when his peculiar climb began
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.             in three-line stanzas similar
.             to these  I now was in
.             for who knows how damned long a tour.

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Click this to visit The Pedestal Magazine where the review I had to do this month is.  I found it difficult to write, and–chee, I keep wanting to keep everything in this paragraph iambic; that dumb rhyme of mine has really gotten to me–and I don’t think I did a terrific job.  I hope it’s not too bad, though, and that the poet treated doesn’t get too upset with me.

I should be in good spirits now.  My hip is no longer keeping me from playing tennis reasonably well, for my age, and my health seems otherwise okay.  My financial picture has improved, for I’ve recently been able to consolidate some of my debts and lower my interest rates a good deal.  I got the review done, and my latest column for Small Press Review.  My booklet about the taxonomy of poetry is ready for printing.  Yet, I’m weary, and can’t seem to get anything consequential done.  Oh, well, maybe it’s just holiday blues.  And the continuing cold weather (in a house with a heating system barely able to keep the house at sixty when it’s less than that outside–except here in my computer room where I have a space heater).  And I no longer have a cat . . .

Entry 321 — Rhyming Fun, Part 8

Tuesday, December 21st, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             He spat, then shimmered more surreal
.             than he had been before,
.             his torso now a golden wheel,
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.             his his my dead cat burning bright,
.             his her an open door
.             to Blake’s most cruelly tygered night,

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These two were tough to write.    I tried to add to the poem twice, once before tennis, once after, and got nowhere.  Only after a nap, and sitting at my keyboard for a half-hour, did I get anything down.  I’d been close to taking my first day off from the poem.   The secret to continuing, of course, is constantly to increase one’s irresponsible as a narrator.  But the latest stanzas, believe it or not,  seem to me to be going somewhere seriously interesting.

Entry 320 — Rhyming Fun, Part 7

Monday, December 20th, 2010

.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.                                       The farmer laughed
.             at my unhappiness,
.             then quickly shot a feathered shaft
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.             that passed completely through my head.
.             He shrugged off my distress
.             “Naught I’d not do to rhyme,” he said.
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.             “Too much of that is going on!”
.             I screamed.  “This text is vile!”
.             “Not so,” the farmer lisped, “for Khan
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.             it hath, from distant Xanadu,
.             and other marks of style
.             not evident to fools like you.”
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Dang, rhyming is easy if you don’t care what you’re saying.

Entry 319 — Rhyming Fun, Part 6

Sunday, December 19th, 2010

.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             “It’s evening,” moaned the unseen sea.
.             The farmer murmurred, “Yup.”
.             Not just for decoration, he!
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.             At length the other man, whose name
.             was “Poem,” as I should
.             have said by now, began a game
.
.             of chess with me, in hopes that it
.             might somehow do me good
.             But no.  So bad was I, I quit
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.             almost at once.
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Entry 317 — Rhyming Fun, Part 4

Friday, December 17th, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             The other hesitated till
.             he’d come up with a rhyme.
.             “Well, after such a lengthy time
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.             “it’s good to meet you face to face,”
.             quothe he.  “Your brain is nil!”
.             I raged.  “Your rhyme is out of place.”
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.             Before my victim could reply,
.             from north of Xanadu
.             a submarine dropped from the sky.
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.             Peace blissed me to my very core.
.             I stuck my hand out to
.             the man I’d had such anger for.

I bet you who are reading this can’t wait to find out what next happens!  I have to say, I’m amazed that I’ve been able to keep the game going as long as I have without doing anything wrong except by intention–even at the level I’m working.  And it’s still fun!  Could I possibly do a hundred stanzas?  As each day ends, I doubt I could do two more, but who knows . . .

Enter 316 — Rhyming Fun, Part 3

Wednesday, December 15th, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             “Hold on, hold on.  My being here
.             is wholly due to chance.
.             You haven’t anything to fear.
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.             “Apparently I’ve gone insane
.             and somehow in a trance
.             descended into your domain.”

Entry 315 — Rhyming Fun, Part 2

Wednesday, December 15th, 2010

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.             A Visit to Poem, Continued
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.             “I hope it’s not to let me go.
.             I’ve not done very well
.             at alter-egoing, I know,
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.             “But that is your fault more than mine:
.             your texts, quite frankly, smell,
.             not one choice phrase or decent line.”

I think I’ll try for two stanzas a day, but be satisfied if I can do one–or even just a line.
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